If I had a chance to go to abroad I would surely choose Spain.I always wanted to go to Spain.There are several reasons for that.Firstly I like Spain very much.Because its weather is quite well.What's more its geography is very important,next to many developed European countries and it has many beautiful historical places.And its beaches are very famous.
As many people know La Liga is the second most difficult league in the world.Real Madrid is my favourite team.Also people living in Spain are very friendly.They like tourists.They have many colourful carnavals, too.These carnavals attract many people from all over the world.
From another aspect, life quality is quite high there.And altough I don't think it is a good tradition, their traditional bull wrestling attracts not only other people but also me.These wrestlings are held generally in big collesioums.
All in all, I like Spain and Spanish.So my choice would probably be Spain if I had a chance to go abroad.I am sure you would prefer it, too.
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Introduction paragraph is well organised but I couldn't find a good thesis statement. I couldn't find connection between topic sentences and thesis statement and they are not in an order in my opinion. In terms of unity and coherence it seems pretty good except a few mistakes. Conclusion part also would be better if you had summarized the whole essay or parapharesed the thesis statement. That's all.. Don't get angry with me ok? :)
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